In the midst of a commercial break, I heard an add about an organization that helped people get employment. It was a compelling story and when they said, “Your generousity makes this possible”, I realized the organization was a nonprofit.
But I think they blew it. Here’s why.
- They started strong
The story was great. They started with how hard it is to get a job in this economy and even harder in NJ. But because of this organization, people were putting their lives back together.
- They made it clear they were donation funded
I loved the phrase “Your generousity makes this possible.” They had me. “Wow. I make such a difference in people’s lives just by giving?! Tell me more!”
- Then it fell apart in 1 sentence
The last sentence must’ve been written by committee. It said something like “To make your tax-deductible donation and to learn more about The XYZ Nonprofit, go to www.ourwebsite.org.”
I felt jilted.
Don’t stop the emotions
I was on a journey and all of a sudden they through the 5 syllable phrase “tax deductible” at me. That one phrase got me out of my emotional brain into my analytical. I started realizing why it was impractical for me to make a gift.
Then they added the “or to learn more.” What? Did they not really want my gift? It was a little confusing but I started to feel I was off the hook.
Finally they just gave their website. This is bad for two reasons.
- If they really want my donation, don’t make me work to give. Tell me what page to go to. It would’ve been far better for them to say, “Go to www.ournonprofit.org/donate.” That would reiterate the message and make it easier to give.
- They’ll have no clue if that radio ad is working. They could’ve said, “Go to www.ournonprofit.org/WDHA.” The radio station was saying their call letters incessantly. It felt like they repeated them multiple times every minute. Since listeners are used to that, why not use that to your advantage? Then you can track whether that ad is driving traffic and donations.
You could also use a page like “donate1” or use “donate” for the WDHA ad and “give” for another ad.
Tax Deductions are not a fundraising appeal
Survey after survey shows that people don’t primarily give for a tax deduction. So why lead with that as an appeal?
More importantly, if you’re taking your donor prospects on an emotional journey designed to make them act, keep them on the journey through making the donation. Don’t jilt them. Just make it ridiculously easy to give.
Now my flight is about to board so I’ll end there. Do you agree?